[Shangshui Shuo series] day three - VIDEO

【 Together with Shangshui Shuo series 】Day Three - video

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The value of the later courses has soared , Personally, I don't think I should take screenshots all the time ppt 了 , But take notes + Personal understanding is no problem ,

Although my computer likes open source ~ But we have to abide by the intellectual property rights of the open source agreement

Please forgive me

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I found what the article I wrote was called ~ It is a kind of reflective writing~ Personal views are very strong

Review yesterday's content

Mainly about EE and RAD

• Reading strategies

  • Scan, skim, concentrate and get a general understanding of
• about EE Important

  • Understand what you're supposed to do Mission objectives ( At the end of this chapter, I write EE Content )
• Some academic terms

  • describe : Give real information to describe something , Don't add personal opinions to the description .( Objective description )
  • summary : The summary only says the key points and ignores the details
  • analysis : The analysis needs to analyze the details and explain What is it and why ? That is, we need dialectical thinking , Although this is subjective , But the more rigorous the process of dialectical thinking is, the more objective it will be .( This is a new understanding after reading today's lesson )
  • evaluation : The evaluation needs to be supported by real data . Charts, etc.

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video stay transcript( stay day3 lesson A in ) There are online links in With subtitles .

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Video 1

• IELTS limited time writing and academic assessment The difference between

  • IELTS is probably 40 Minute write 250words
  • Academic writing is about a month

• The grammar and vocabulary of academic writing and IELTS writing are also different

  • Academic writing is more objective ,
  • And more complicated , This complexity doesn't mean that it's more complicated to get started , But the sentence pattern is more complicated
  • More formal , It means using more complicated and formal words .

• Object Writing style is very common In academic writing

  • The point needs to have

    • Research supports
    • Evidence suggests that
    • Logic conforms to
  • The tutor needs proof that your point is objective Otherwise, it is emotional expression
  • Do you want to Based on facts And show your critical thinking

• All content should be based on trusted resources

  • Therefore, it is necessary to identify the credibility
  • Quote... Correctly , Author's name + Years of publication + A verb
  • All statements must have a theoretical basis , There is no theoretical basis " objective " Of

    • Basically, you can trust what you find , But if a document is too long, it should not be trusted ( This is related to the field , Most computer foundations are very early )
  • It also needs to be evaluate Research , Theories and other statements . That is, we should have our own assessment after finding out ( Yes, of course , There will also be a process of critical thinking when you look for it , Now you can understand , Academic writing will be very, very, very precise , Every point of thinking needs to be shown )

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• Also mentioned Hedging,cautious,tentative language( The last two words are really good , Use words carefully , Tentative )

  • Be sure to use... When expressing yourself
  • In can't 100% In the right case, use
  • To speculate, use , For example, the future economic growth trend
  • There are these words - may, might, possibly, probably, perhaps
• Also mentioned Task The answer to a question , I wrote in detail task part

Video 2

How to make our writing more academic ?

• Complexity is not the same as complicated

  • Complexity is different from complexity
• Academic writing requires frequent use of

  • passive passive voice and noun phrases noun phrase

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Explain the passive voice above : A focus on tax on cigarette The change of , Not the originator government Or we all know the originator , So use the passive voice .

( Not all content should be passive , This is just to emphasize , Passive voice is a very common grammatical structure in academic writing )

• You need to use

  • relative clause Relative clause
  • complex sentences complex sentence

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( It is a compound sentence that is often said in China , This sentence is a master-slave compound sentence . subordinate caluse clause )

What he said in the last sentence is more complicated , Because it is a commonly used academic word in English , What simple sentence Compound sentence , complex sentence , Complex complex sentences . To put it bluntly, simple sentences, complex sentences and causal sentences are used ~ diversification

Video 3

Formality

• Avoid using phrases , Use separate words , For example, there is no need to look for use search

  • Actually, the Chinese people are OK ? Because I remember we had this requirement when we wrote the composition
• Then don't abbreviate , be called "contract" Appointment ~

  • don't Write do not
  • can't Write cannot
• Do not use Some subjective emotional words , For example, bad , It's wonderful ~
• Do not use I/we my/our etc. Although it will appear in some genres , however EE You are not allowed to
• Do not use , I think/ in my opinion, The article should be objective

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I really like this style when I see here , Because I am particularly disgusted with the reason that I only ask for no reason , Even if it is repeated here ppt The reason will also be repeated in .

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Domestic education is more suitable for , Think more , Because there are only a few teaching materials

English education is more suitable for , Sort out more classified critical thinking , Because I teach a lot , More verbose . So integration is needed

This view can be confirmed by the complexity and repetition of course materials .

// I've always been rational , To put it mildly, it is critical thinking ...(sry)

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Pay attention to the way you speak , Be objective , Increase academic credibility ~ If it's subjective , Even if the article is nice It is also difficult for us to introduce objectively ~

• And, But, Or, So, Then, Especially Try not to use

  • And - In addition, Additionally, Another feature/aspect
  • But - However, Instead, Although, Despite, In spite of
  • Or - Alternatively, Another, conversely
  • So - therefore, Consequence, As a result
  • Then - following this
  • Especially - This is particularly the case sentence ...

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  The last one, that is, the single adverb, is not very academic , It is better to substitute a sentence for . IELTS is OK

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• You can't use some words that IELTS can use , such as what's more, last but not least, every coin has two sides, double-edged sword.

• Out-of-service thing, stuff, bad, nowadays, To be more specific

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here video 3 It's over , The other two haven't uploaded ? I have to download it from my own location

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Video 4

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• What are the problems with the updated article

  • Why do they have low productivity , There must be evidence , If not, use tentative language
  • Why does it lead to job loss? Explain further ?
  • It will definitely lead to low scores ? Use tentative language
  • You can't find a good job ?

    • You have to explain the root cause , The most direct reason , This is a very important difference between Chinese and foreigners . Foreigners are not used to jumping thinking , Keep going straight
    • The reason for not having a good job is not because of low exam scores , There is no necessary cause and effect , But because I don't study hard , Poor ability , As a result of
  • Do you have to have a goal every day ? Be tactful .

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So my conclusion is , As long as it's your own words , Whether it's your own experience or something , As long as it's your own Without theoretical basis , Just Euphemism / Critical thinking to explain .

It can be seen whether the above content is euphemistic or the evidence shows that it can be solved by critical thinking . however ! If you can't explain , We should make our articles more academic according to the requirements .( Follow the rules if you have limited ability ~)

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This is the point where thinking can be improved

Video 5

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The content is OCR Image recognition , There may be a discrepancy , Forgive me

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Mainly to solve 4 Questions left

• For example if staff spend more work time on internet with things that is irrelevant to work they will have less productivity and may cause job loss.

• Internet addiction can have negative outcomes for different groups of people. For example, if employees spend more work time on the internet with activities that are irrelevant to their job, they will be less productive. This may cause job losses if the workforce is Cut to reduce costs.

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The last conditional clause must exist , This is not necessarily the only one that will lead to , But write a situation that will lead to

hold logic work It's got to be better some ~

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• And when students spend too much time on online games or TV series, the consequence will be bad scores and they may cannot find a good paid future.
• Adverse results are also likely to occur when students spend too much time on online games or TV series. The consequences are often low scores, which may affect their ability to find a well-paid job in the future.

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There's nothing wrong with that , It's not difficult to understand. ~ It is also a common mistake in IELTS ~

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This is given in the video Links to additional introductions to academic writing uefap.com/writing/writfram.htm

Copy the old rules to url+www.

Notes

empirical evidence How to understand Experimental evidence .

Video original sentence

• Your tutor wants to know that you can show demonstrate and support your ideas with evidence from academic sources.

• We can only think of them as affection.

  • If there is no evidence that , Then your narration will be regarded as an emotional expression .. Not considerable

• Latin based single word verbs are preferred over phrasal verbs. So, for example, instead of look up we use search instead of look into.

  • This one says , Don't use phrases, use independent words ~

Task

This student is business Of , So focus on internet in business